waiting for you, my love gathering the ross we sang of the grief your very voice is in my heartbeat sweeter than despair we were there, in everylasting bloomunderneath the star shaded by the flowers kiss me in the summer gloom, my love you are all my pleasure, my hope and my songroses die名师点评:诗歌写得很浪漫,表达的感情强烈,用词细腻,有点复古的感觉。小作者不但写作能力强,英文水平也非常高哦!Roses die结尾,意境深远。小作者要注意句首的单词第一个字母的大写以及标点符号的注明。“潘多拉之心”改为“The heart of Pandora”或“Pandora Hearts”英文诗歌应有英文标题。“everylasting”改为“everylasting”意为“永久的”。(学乐中国特聘教师:陈金枝老师)2010-4-29 13:07:00