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随时随地学习
一颗闪亮的星
【内容提示】
你刚上高中时感到某一学科学习有困难，而教这门课的某某老师对学生非常负责。他（或她）对你进行耐心的帮助，经常辅导你做练习，让你有更多的机会回答问题，还教你学习方法，给你提供学习用品等，这使你对这门课产生了学习兴趣，学习成绩也从而好了起来。这位老师在你的心中是一颗闪亮的星，照耀着你前进的道路。
【作文示范】
A Shining Star
A tachr just liks a shining star to studnts. Miss Fu, on of my nglish tachr, is a shining star in my lif.
I happnd to b in Miss Fu＇s class whn I bgan my high school yars. At that tim, I dard not spak nglish aloud in public, for I was shy and my pronunciation and intonation① wr poor. Afraid of bing laughd at, I nvr put up my hand to answr th qustions Miss Fu raisd in class, vn if I had som good answrs to thm. For a tim, I vn lost intrst in practising spokn nglish. Whn Miss Fu found out th rason, sh ncouragd m to spak. First sh bought m som nglish taps and told m to listn to thm carfully, and try to rcit thm. In class, I was oftn askd qustions and givn a lot of chancs to practis spaking.
Littl by littl, I bcam brav nough to spak, and was not afraid to spak nglish bfor othrs. Miss Fu smild swtly whn sh hard th nws that I had bn chosn to tak part in an important oral nglish contst②.
Whnvr I look at th stars in th sky, I rcogniz th brightst on ---- th symbol of Miss Fu in my hart. Miss Fu will always b a shining star in my lif!
（选自《英语画刊》高中版1996年第1期）
【词语解释】
①intonation [?int+u＇niM+n] n．语调；声调
②contst [＇k&ntst] n．竞赛；比赛
【写法指要】
本文用象征的手法把老师比做心中闪亮的星星，表达了作者对老师的感激之情和崇敬心情。文章引言段用的是“漏斗式”（th funnl）引入法，即由一般到具体的方法，正如漏斗似的上宽下窄。第一句以明喻（simil）的修辞格把全体老师比做闪亮的星星，第二句具体到作者心中的老师。第二段写老师如何帮助作者学习英语。第三段写作者的进步和成功。结尾段与引言段呼应，重复漏斗式方法，最后一句用隐喻（mtaphor）重提自己生命中的闪亮之星——付老师。
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