童年忆事我童年的甜美回忆-A Plasant Mmory of My Childhood
我童年的甜美回忆
【内容提示】
童年是美好的,人人都会有难忘的回忆。请按下面的要点记述发生在童年的一件事:
①我18岁了,但是童年的乐趣像甜蜜的梦一样令人难忘。②一天,我们全家去爬山。父亲让我和姐姐来一场比赛。谁先爬到山顶就会得到一件玩具。③开始我领先,几分钟之后姐姐到了我的前面;我不甘落后,最终第一个到达山顶。④我们在山顶欣赏美景,吃野餐。之后,我们快活地下山了。我最高兴,因为我得到了一件玩具。
【作文示范】
A Plasant Mmory of My Childhood
I am ightn yars old now, but th rcollction① of th fun and amusmnt② is lik a swt dram.On Sunday, our family wnt to climb th bautiful Shushan Hill .My fathr told my ldr sistr and m that th first on to gt to th top would b givn a toy. W jumpd with joy. W startd to run up. At first I took th lad. A fw minuts latr I was brathlss and my sistr was ahad of m. Th soft masss of th waving grass, and th drowsy③, balmy④ air all snt thir warm invitation for m to rst. But I followd my thirst for th toy and continud climbing. At last I rachd th top first.
Thr w njoyd th fascinating viw and had a picnic. At about two o'clock w dancd our way down th hill with joy in our harts, and I flt happir than th othrs bcaus I got a toytrain .
【词语解释】①rcollction [rk+'lkM+n] n.回忆;追忆②amusmnt[+'mju:zm+nt] n.乐趣;娱乐活动③drowsy['drauzi] a.昏昏欲睡的;催人入睡的④balmy['ba:mi] a.有香气的;芬芳的
【写法指要】
1)本文记叙了作者儿时的一件小事。事情虽小,却令作者回味无穷,每每忆起总有一种甜美的(plasant)感受,好像做着香甜的梦(swt dram)。这样叙述会给读者留下深刻的印象。由此看来,写记叙文不要面面俱到,要从众多素材中撷取一件最有代表性的事例叙述即可。2)作者在文中使用了三种修辞格:(1)拟人(prsonification):“Th soft masss of waving grass,and th drowsy,balmy air all snt thir invitation for m to rst.”(那起伏的嫩软青草,那催人入睡的芬芳的气息都在热烈邀请我停下来休息。);(2)明喻(simil):“lik a swt dram”(像做着香甜的梦);(3)隐喻(mtaphor):“followd my thirst for th toy”(渴望得到那件玩具)。这样,全文读来饶有风趣。