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My name is MaYanying . I＇m 13 year old. I＇m a girl. I have a good family. My family are there 4 peoples,my mother , father , borther , and me. My mother is a teacher . She love her stuends . She＇s very kind . She is read books , go shopping , and do houswork on weekend. My father is a doctor . He is buy . he＇s tall and strong . He＇s funny . He on the sunday is play computergames and play sports . My borther is 6 year . he is shrot and thin . He is cuet . He＇s watch TV ,do homework , and go hiking. I love my family ! 名师点评：
Your family is really full of happiness. Your article is very detailed. I believe you can make more progress in the future. 莹莹，你的家庭充满了欢笑和爱心。在这样的环境下长大的你，一定也是聪明可爱吧。文章虽然不长，但是段落清晰，内容详实。唯一美中不足的是，忽略了一些书写上的规范，如相邻单词之间空一格，句首单词首字母要大写，以及一些拼写和语法上的错误。永远不要因为错误和气馁，他们只是你下次进步的方向！老师相信经过你的不懈努力，你的英文一定会更棒的！加油哦！你已经很棒了！O(∩_∩)O~~（快乐学堂特聘教师：周老师） 2009-7-20 21:18:19
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